Nisam "normalan" zbog jedne svoje pjesme ?

Pišem vec lirike 2 i pol godine. Prosle sedmice sam napisao malo "blesavu" i u crunckcore style pjesmu, cisto iz zabave da se maknem na kratko od reperskih pjesama.

Naime pokazao sam dosta ljudima tu pjesmu, i po prvi put sam dobio negativan dojam - to me nimalo ne brine jer ne moze mi svaka pjesma biti dobra. Al me buni sto su mi poceli govorit da nisam normalan samo zbog te pjesme ? -.-

Pisem ja svakakve pjesme od besmislenih do probleme u stvarnom zivotu pa cak i za "disco".

Al ne kontam zasto kazu da je bolje da se drzim "depresivnih" pjesama, i da nastavim repat a ne "vristat" sto trenutno dosta bendova radi ? U cemu je tu problem ?

Takodje, zasto mi svi govore da pisem pjesme na bosanskom a ne na engleskom jeziku ? Zar nije bolje na engleskom jeziku pisat jer vise stima mom stilu i sto ce vise ljudi razumiti ?

Evo tekst pjesme (malo je dugo):

COME ON !!!!!!

If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!
If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!

Let's go motha fukka let's go motha fukka,
Stay on the ground, don't you dare to fall, jump around,
Wave with your hands up (WHAT) (x3)

Let's go all nody, let's go all party,
Let's do this sh*t whole freaking night,
It's time to get freaky now, yea let's get freaky now (x3)

If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!
If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!

GET UP LET'S GET DRUNK,
STAY ON THE GROUND, LET'S JUMP AROUND,
GET UP, LET'S PARTY ALL THE NIGHT,
LET'S GET FUCKING CRUNK
LET'S GET FUCKING DRUNK MOTHAFUKKA
It's time to get freaky now,
Cmon let's get freaky now,
It's time to get freaky now,
Let's get fucking freaky now,
Damn it's time to get freaky now!!!

If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!
If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!

GET UP
GET DRUNK
GET CRUNK
GET FREAKY
GET NODY
GET NASTY

LET'S BECOME FU***S,
LET'S BECOME A**OLES,
LET'S BECOME DRUNK TONIGHT,
LET'S BECOME CRUNK NOW,
LET'S BECOME F*****G FREAKYYYYY!

We are freaks, we are just f*****g freaks,
Cmon guys let's get all freaky now,
Let's get damn freaky now,
Just let us get freaky now

If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!
If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!

If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!
If you are down motha fukka throw your hands up,
Don't be on the ground, throw your body up,
GET UP, GET UP, GET UP, GET UP !!!

bez uvrede, al ovo je bezveze i glupo...

Kao prvo čestitke što si napisao pjesmu, nisam ekstra fan hip-hopa (svaka čast iznimkama) ali cijenim kad netko radi svoje stvari.

Iskreno, pjesma nije dobra, ali ruku na srce nije se ni npr 50 cent proslavio mudrim lirikama. Ipak predložio bi ti da ne pišeš nekakvim crnačkim slengom: npr. "motha fukka", jer to nema veze s tobom. Niti si crnac, niti si iz Bronxa :)   Inače, već predloženo pisanje pjesama na bosanskome je jako dobra ideja.

Autori poput Marchela, Tram 11, Edo Maajka itd. pokazuju koliko engleski jezik može ispasti inferioran i ne zanimljiv.

Hm...

Kazete nemam kvalitete ?

Pjesma za sve hejtere u ovom svijetu:

Have you ever felt the hate
That people share
Just because they are jealous
They spend hours,weeks,months even years
To say a lie
About a famous person
Just to destroy them
And enjoy in their pain

You know why you hate them

Because you are jealous of them,
that they are popular and you are not.
That they have friends and you don't have.
You do this because you do not have life
and want to destroy other people's life
Just to enjoy in their pain

When are you gonna notice
That you are destroying your life
Not theirs

No matter how hard do you try
No matter how much you want to ruin them
You won't be able to
CUS THERE ARE MORE FANS THAN HATERS

DO you even know why you wanna ruin them ?

Because you are jealous of them,
that they are popular and you are not.
That they have friends and you don't have.
You do this because you do not have life
and want to destroy other people's life
Just to enjoy in their pain

Anti-suicide pjesma sa kojom sam spasio zivot svom prijatelju:

Standing on the roof, you are looking down and see a sea of people.
You think that they are happy with their life,
that they don't have any problems.
You want to suicide,
cause you think that your life is not worth,
that there are no people who want to help you.
But there are people who care for you,
you have your friends who love you,
and would be very sad to see you dead.

[Pre-chorus]
Why would you suicide
when you are still very young
and life is in front of you?
Your life and style doesn't matter to me,
as long as you want help.

[Chorus]
Let me help you,
let me save you,
you still have chance for life so,
Let me help you,
let me save you,
I will help you just allow me.

You are still standing on the roof,
ready to suicide, cause you think your life sux.
But everybody has problems but they actually face them,
just by killing yourself, you show as that you are too weak to face them.

[Pre-chorus]
Why would you suicide
when you are still very young
and life is in front of you?
Your life and style doesn't matter to me,
as long as you want help.

[Chorus]
Let me help you,
let me save you,
you still have chance for life so,
Let me help you,
let me save you,
I will help you just allow me.

[Bridge]
Open your eyes and think for a second,
is it really worth to kill yourself ?
Just take my hand, give yourself one more chance
And don't jump..i'm still with you

[Chorus]
Let me help you,
let me save you,
you still have chance for life so,
Let me help you,
let me save you,
I will help you just allow me.

  Ovu pjesmu sam napisao kad su me ljudi pitali sta ja tacno pokusavam:

So many people have died in war,
they died to save their country,to save their family,
Right now, I'm standing on the graveyard, and wondering,
What I'm doing,for what I'm fighting, and then I understood,
I'm fighting for music, for rapping,screaming,singing cause
I'm dopest in that,and I'll try my best to focus on that,
No matter what cause music is my life.

I'll rap about life,
scream about pain,
sing about depression,
my music,my lyrics all have a message,all have some meaning,
I don't rap about usual relationship issues,
I rap about my life,but lyrics carry a message,
I scream about pain,that most people feel and have,
I sing about depression,period everybody goes through,
I'm the dopest.

Everybody fights for something, so do I,
I do what I'm the best in, like most people do,
The only meaning in my life is music and my lyrics,
I write everything by myself,
everything that happened in my life,
everything that happens in people's life,
not crap things that nobody can stand.

For example brokencyde,
they are crunkcore band,
They do what they are best in,
They rap and scream cause they are the dopest in that,
They are my insipration,
Seven my idol for rapping and screaming,
they don't give a fuck about haters,
cause they just makes us more famous.

I'll rap about life,
scream about pain,
sing about depression,
my music,my lyrics all have a message,all have some meaning,
I don't rap about usual relationship issues,
I rap about my life,but lyrics carry a message,
I scream about pain,that most people feel and have,
I sing about depression,period everybody goes through,
I'm the dopest.

@Aliser: ti radi ono što ti radi gušt, u tome bi i trebala biti poanta pisanja pjesme jel? Iskazivanje vlastitih ideja, osjećaja/emocija kroz tekst koji je usklađen sa glazbom, a ne kopiranjem nećega samo zato jer to "većina puši" kako bi se samo zaradilo. A to što eto tekst nije nešto, jbga treba odnekud početi, nitko se učen nije rodio...

  Upravo to. Ne mora meni svaki tekst imati nekog smisla, ima dosta tih poznatih muzicara sa bezveznim pjesmama (hello Lady gaga)

Iskreno, pjesma nije dobra, ali ruku na srce nije se ni npr 50 cent proslavio mudrim lirikama. Ipak predložio bi ti da ne pišeš nekakvim crnačkim slengom: npr. "motha fukka", jer to nema veze s tobom. Niti si crnac, niti si iz Bronxa :) Inače, već predloženo pisanje pjesama na bosanskome je jako dobra ideja.

Ma ovu pjesmu necu ni snimit napisao sam je cisto iz zabave. A ovo motha fukka to forum po skoli sa drugom Sevenom (takodje clan ovog foruma).

A pjesme na bosanskom tesko jer bas i ne znam pisat a kamoli pjevat :P

Ova muddha fukka pjesma dal bi bila dobra ili ne ovisi o glazbi jer moze bit glazba uber i ono bas da ti pase za uho a rijeci katastrofa (ko ove npr.)

evo po meni grozne rijeci a opet slusas pjesmu i obozavas je:

Chumbawamba - Tubthumping

Intro:

We'll be singin'
When we're winnin'
We'll be singin'

Repeat (4x):

I get knocked down
But I get up again
You're neva gonna
Keep me down

Pissin' the night away
Pissin' the night away

He drinks a whisky drink
He drinks a vodka drink
He drinks a lager drink
He drinks a cider drink
He sings the songs that
Remind him
Of the good times
He sings the songs that
Remind him
Of the betta times:

"Oh Danny Boy
Danny Boy
Danny Boy

Danny Boy..."

rijeći su ti koma kao i u većini današnjih hitova...uglazbi to i postat ćeš slavan 

sad znam zašto slušam metal...svaka pjesma ima bar neku poruku i smisao rijeći....

Get up - crunkcore

Haters - metal

Let me help you (anti-suicide pjesma): melodic metal

The dopest- rap rock pjesma (rok muzika al repas)

Al uglavnom ove pjesme imaju nekog smisla.

A ove pjesme cu kad-tad snimit tijekom ove sedmice sa ovim Amarom koji isto repa i pravi muziku.

Edit:

Znam u tome je problem, jer kad god sam trazio studio da snimim pjesme uvijek traze pjesme na bosanskom jeziku iliti ljubavne/zabavne pjesme -.-

el taj radio proradio...daj link da slušamo :D ako radi :D

Snimim pjesme, pošaljem tebi, ti ih pustiš na radio ? xD

Zažto bi postao gluh xD

Ja cu se dogovorit veceras sa Amarom oko ovog snimanja posto ne idemo u istu skolu a on je prva a ja druga smjena >.>

Aliser kompa,ljuti se koliko god hoces,ali mislim da si malo previse ufuran.

Slusam hip-hop i iskreno mislim da imas talenta,ali se malo previse furas na "hard-core ghetto hip hop".

Time vjerovatno zelis privuci pozornost kopirajuci druge hip-hopere koji su uspjeli na jednako slicnim besmislenim psovackim stihovima.

No opet,svaki poznatiji hip-hoper ima svoj prepoznatljivi stil,to bi trebao forsirati i ti,jer imas dara!

Shvati ovo kao pozitivnu kritiku,u nadi da cu jednoga dana uzivati te slusajuci na koncertu!

Ostavi se pjesama, uhvati se knjige :)